Friday, November 29, 2013

Mirage blog tour

Abbii can’t remember a time when Shadows weren’t chasing her.

Everywhere she goes they are there, hunting her down.

Since discovering the magical powers in her grasp, she has fought against members of the Forgotten- those pulled into Darkness willingly- and her friends have fallen into danger. Innocent people have lost their lives and the Shadows have spread. Abbii’s friends have fought to remain by her side, but something inside of her has changed.

She is filled with regret and pain of losing her best friend Jake, though she keeps it hidden well- not even Nate can see the damage. Her lack of emotion pushes him to leave and he is thrown into his own spiralling destiny.

Abbii has a choice- to stay by her friends’ sides and fight to protect their home, or leave the realm she knows and search for those that she has lost. Her heart is broken but her friends cannot help her. She has to choose between searching for Jake in the Dark, or whether to return to Nate’s side and keep the Light burning brightly.


The question is, will Light be able to save her from the Darkness within?



Extracted scenes- why were they removed?

“The college grounds were closest to the group. It was as if they had returned, but the air still felt the same. Beyond the main building, various groups of houses and streets lined the ground. Abbii could see her own among them, causing a shiver to consume her skin. She realised that every one of the random houses in the centre of the arrangement belonged to each one of her friends- they weren’t random at all. Their memories would materialise as soon as they returned to their homes, Abbii knew it without a doubt. She glanced over her friends’ faces, seeing that they all feared what awaited them, and then focused ahead. The various homes lead into Pennyworth—the large church standing out like a rounded stone dropped to the ground randomly—and the surrounding beach signalled the end.’’
I have been told many times that I have a habit of telling rather than showing. Here is a great example. I tend to try and explain things in depth, without describing what is actually happening at the appropriate time. Here, I am removing this section- I don’t mention any of the group’s own emotions or that they’ve realised their homes are waiting up ahead. I should wait until they have reached the centre of the town, express their emotions of shock and confusion at finding their homes, and then show how their memories form, revealing what each one of them have lived through.

I hope that the scene which will follow will give the reader an extra insight into each one of my characters. I want it to be a surprise when they learn what some of them have lived through. A small hint like the one above isn’t needed, at all; especially when it doesn’t add anything to the story when I simply say ‘their memories would materialise.’ There’s no description, nothing. *Shakes head*


Unless I have described something completely wrong, most of the extracted scenes are removed because I tell rather than show. It’s a bad habit that I need to break!


Clemy was born in the UK in 1991 where she still lives, growing up alongside one younger and three older brothers.
Books and writing was an interest that she began to develop from the first years of secondary school, and on her thirteenth birthday, she began to plan and design the idea to write a fantasy novel. She finished secondary school with high GCSE's and then went on into further education to study English and all aspects of art and design. After six years of writing, planning and overall editing of the book, it was successfully completed, containing over 82,000 words, and self published in the first week of 2011.
With high expectations in herself, she immediately began to write a second novel in the series, while keeping her art and design a part of the process. The achievement of completing the first novel 'Purest Light,' allowed the ideas of the second to flow much easier and it was completed by early 2012. As she was writing the third and final book, New Beginnings, at the same time, the series was finished by its publication in 2013.
Writing is now a part of her everyday and she has now started her newest project, The Mirage, which is book two of three. 

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